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In the day, yellow sand
from the Taklamakan
coats the motorbikes
of your overlords

At night, this city's towers
gleam, a Chinatown of lights
(dragon gold, lantern red)

Here, you can eat
a Philadelphia roll
or a fortune cookie
with fictional
Confucian quotes
on the side

Or you can dive
into a Pacific of
specific patterns,
woven with
living threads
in wire cocoons

Don't get distracted
by the innumerable
neon kanji; trace
the tiny green
lights to the
computer shop
at the end of
the way.
Another poem from "Historical Technology." I would say it critiques and pokes fun at Western perceptions of Oriental cultures, while simultaneously providing a way in which to rethink those perceptions...
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Orientalism by ~kajigoddess ( Featured by BeccaJS )
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Angie-Pictures Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011
! Congratulations on the DD! :iconflowerheartplz:
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PTDaHood Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011   Writer
Ooohhh, nice structure.

And that portrayal of Chinatown. As a Chinese-American, I'm just frothing at the mouth in joy xD
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
As a white American, I am extremely honored by the fact that you felt the energy of Chinatown in my work. :)
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Zumiex Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Congrads on your Daily DEVAAAAATIOONNNNNNNNNNN!
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
THAAAAAANKS!!!!!
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Zumiex Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
You're welcome! :D
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Floral-Moon-Zenith Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
This is a fantastical and well written poem. I love the imagery and carefully chosen words.
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for your compliments. They are greatly appreciated. ^_^
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Floral-Moon-Zenith Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
It's my pleasure. Keep up the good work! ^_^
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Li-flower Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Great imagery. All the colors remind me of both Chinatown and Tokyo or Hong Kong. I love the dichotomy and, like QyJx, the irony of a Philadelphia roll (reminds me of the time when my co-worker in Japan said, "California rolls aren't real sushi).
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I have to admit that I've never been to any East Asian countries before, but I have seen San Francisco's Chinatown a few times. Needless to say, that (as well as popular conceptions of East Asian cuisine) had a huge influence on the making of this poem.
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monterae Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i really like the line "you can dive into a Pacific of specific patterns." ^_^ its got a great ring to it.
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venturus Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011   Writer
proceeds with a stately beauty and full of good images. personally i'd want to make some cuts. how much can you live without? 'in the day'? 'at night'? 'here'? maybe all a little prosaic? and i'm a great believer in the power of the noun - how many adjectives can go? wondered about something like:

Yellow sand
from the Taklamakan
coats the motorbikes
of your overlords

This city's towers
gleam, dragon gold,
lantern red,
a Chinatown

Philadelphia rolls,
fortune cookies
with fictional
Confucian quotes

And a Pacific
of patterns, woven
with living threads
in wire cocoons

Forget the neon kanji;
green lights lead to
the computer shop.
Follow the way.
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QyJx Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Student Writer
I love the way this flows. My favorite part was probably,

"Here, you can eat
a Philadelphia roll
or a fortune cookie
with fictional
Confucian quotes
on the side"

Because it's here that your message really jumped out at me. Many people actually think these things are "Asian," and they associate them together in one group even though a sushi roll is Japanese and a fortune cookie is "Chinese" (though it was invented in California). I also like that the roll is a "Philadelphia," so it's just as "Japanese" as a fortune cookie is "Chinese" in a sense.
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Lovely work!
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for the compliment! ^_^
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
You're welcome :)
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angelStained Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011   Writer
Brilliance. I wasn't really interested from the start, but the scenes kept me going to read the apt ending.
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ReygarFaust Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Professional Photographer
Wonderful work! Thank you!
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. ^_^
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A colorful and imaginative piece.
Congratulations on your DD. :party:
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Confucius say: Baseball all wrong, man with 4 balls no can walk!
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Exactly what I meant by a fictional Confucian quote. xD
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JDWasabi Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats again ;D
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
And thanks yet again! :D
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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kajigoddess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! And I thought you had to be a celebrity to get tweeted about. xD
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
You just need to write pretty. :)
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